Renga ~ Week 2 Results

The judging just keeps getting more difficult as nearly every haiku submitted this week could have been chosen for the Renga.

A few poems did not meet the 5-7-5 syllable requirement for this week. Remember, they will alternate between. 7-7 syllable couplet (this coming week’s required form) and the aforementioned 5-7-5 haiku.

Also, a couple were either a little too off topic, or did not diverge enough from the Hokku. Remember, each stanza is relevant only to the one immediately preceding and immediately following it. So that this week’s haiku should have pivoted away from the Hokku and only related to it in an oblique way.

Keep in mind that this is new to all of us. We are constantly consulting what references we have. But also, this is not a competition. Rather, it is a collaboration and whether your proffered poem is selected or not, you are helping to create the Renga.
That said, the poem chosen this week is:

An ancient turtle

basking on a verdant log

stretches to the sun 

From Janice at:

ontheland.wordpress.com

I hope her haiku inspires you to come up with a wonderful couplet for this week’s round.

Make sure to post your 7-7 couplets in the comments of the original Renga Party post by midnight eastern time (think New York). No other poems will be considered for inclusion in the Renga.

Thank you all so much for joining in this #poetsforpeace experience with us.

The Poet Trio

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We’re Having a Party! ~ A Renga Party!

Happy Martin Luther King Jr. Day (1/15/2017)

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The Mission

We challenge you as Poets to use your words in the interest of peace.

Make your poems instruments of change in the world, a change toward universal peace. If you would use your words to cut, let it be with surgical precision that you use to cut out the cancer of hate.

Use your words as torches, not to burn down, but to light the way.

If you would use your words as bricks, use them not to hurl at one another, but lay them on the ground carefully from end to end to pave a road so that those behind you know the right direction and have an easier time getting to where you are.

Use them to build bridges not walls, schools and not prisons, homes and not homeless shelters.

If you must use your words as weapons, let it be to defend the defenseless, but in a way that does no harm and sets an example for others to follow.

Do not decimate your enemy with your words, but teach them that in ignorance there is only our own undoing, that we are stronger together than we could ever be divided.

Teach them that love is the reason we are here and that no matter who or what you believe, you are a brother and sister worthy of dignity and respect in this world that belongs to us all.

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A Student of Peace

When we began last year’s collaboration, Martin Luther King Jr.’s legacy weighed heavily on my mind as did the man who inspired his peaceful movement, Mahatma Gandhi. There is much to be reminded of, learned, and put into practice from their examples in these trying times. Never before have we had such instant access to the violent images being broadcast from all around the world from the despicably violent behaviors of the ignorant, the greedy, and the hateful.
It is with the broader subject of peace in mind that we would like to initiate the first in a series of collaborative poems. We have chosen an ancient Japanese form of collaborative poetry, the Renga. For those who are unfamiliar with this form and wish to participate, please avail yourself of the following resource:

Jane Reichhold’s, Bare Bones School of Renga found on her website: www.ahapoetry. com


The Renga, or “Linked Verse,” as it translates roughly from Japanese, was the precursor of the Haiku, which draws it’s name from the initial stanza written for the Renga party. That 5-7-5 syllable stanza is known as the Hokku and is written by the Renga Master who then oversees all the subsequent stanzas written by Renga participants. Imagine a Tanka written by two people and then that continuing in alternating fashion.

Example: (This was written by one person, Michael, The Poetry Channel, and the attribution is simply for illustration.

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Fog cloaks the forest

cedars bathe in autumn mist

the mountain is still

                              -The Poetry Channel

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the sun rises on the coast

bright feathers flit in the trees

                              -Forgotten Meadows

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Jays squawk in alarm

leap in the air in blue waves

feral felines prowl

                              -Writing Wings for You

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Notice that the third stanza makes no sense in relation to the first. This discontinuation is an intentional aspect of the form meant to reflect the transience of existence.

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The Renga Party Structure and Rules

Below is the Hokku from us, the Renga Masters

  • You must be signed in to comment and participate.
  • Upon completion, as is customary, the Renga belongs to all participants in its entirety.
  • You are invited to submit your proposed stanza via comments ON THIS POST ONLY a couplet in the requisite 7-7 syllable format. We will build the Renga one stanza at a time each week.
  • Submissions will alternate in the prescribed fashion 5-7-5 next week, 7-7 the week following,, etc. Comments will be open until Friday, January 20th at midnight EST at which point we will select the winner based on two criteria:
  • Most Likes will pare down the candidates, and the Renga Masters will then vote on which couplet best fits the original Hokku or preceding stanza.
  • Be sure to come back during the week and Like the proposed stanza from the other participants found in the comments you think is best.

The results will be published the following Sunday.

After that, we will alternate the stanzas as required by the form (and as previously stated), next will be a 5-7-5 haiku, and then a 7-7 couplet, and so on for as long as there are a healthy number of responses.

We will continue the Renga for as long as we have interest, but reserve the right to terminate the collaboration at any time we deem the poem has run its course or there is insufficient interest.

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The Subject

We will begin with Compassion and Empathy.
However, one of the core tenants of the form is that each stanza only makes sense in relation to the stanza immediately before and immediately following. For that reason the Renga will take on a life of its own as each poet expresses themselves relevant to the guiding subjects, but particular to the preceding stanza. Make sense?
Below is the Hokku to get this party started. We look forward to reading you.

I Feel Your Pain

Clear crystal dew drops

cascade from weeping willows

filling the Koi pond

M. Zane McClellan

iridescent circles grow

a frog drinks the falling tears

Merril D. Smith Yesterday and today: Merril’s historical musings

An ancient turtle

basking on a verdant log

stretches to the sun

                                             Janice ontheland.wordpress.com

a heron’s wings lift and fall
one feather drifts slowly down

Ken from rivrlogr.wordpress.com

* Remember: You have until midnight (Eastern time, think New York) on the following Friday to post your response in the comments on this post (We’re Having a Party! ~ A Renga Party!) on this blog (Poetsforpeace.wordpress.com). No other submissions will be considered.


The result will be posted the next
Sunday and you can then submit your entry for the next stanza.

If your offering is not selected, please let it encourage you to contribute more. The very act of participating is one of community and we appreciate you joining with us to write for peaceful change in the world.

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